Show Don't Tell

We were given a challenge to be shown a photo and do a piece of show don't tell writing... which is
basically where you have to write describing a moment of emotion and have to list down the amount of things that we can see with describing without telling the reader what the emotion is and then we get to decide why they are so emotional I decided since it was a child that I would do something which I know I hated as a small child !!we then had to colour code everything which would be a clue to how this person is feeling.... enjoy!

Show Don’t Tell

Head tilted down ,eye bags ,underneath my death stare starting its engine

“I CAN’T BELIEVE IT … NO WAY !!” I shout “I'M NOT DOING IT !!”

My death stare getting stronger and stronger hoping she’ll disappear .

I clench my fists and stomp my feet .

Coming towards me to stop my emotion .Mum reaches for me in a steady grasp .”NNOO Let Me GO!”

I scream .But I am defenceless … Mum has already started doing the worst thing she could ……. BRUSHING MY HAIR!!!!

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Show Don’t Tell HIGHLIGHTED!!

Head tilted down ,eye bags ,underneath my death stare starting its engine

“I CAN’T BELIEVE IT … NO WAY !!” I shout “I'M NOT DOING IT !!”

My death stare getting stronger and stronger hoping she’ll disappear .

I clench my fists and stomp my feet .

Coming towards me to stop my emotion .Mum reaches for me in a steady grasp.There is no way im letting her do this! .But I am defenceless … Mum has already started doing the worst thing she could ……. BRUSHING MY HAIR!!!!